The travel life of a letter [use possive tense]
Once upon a time, a piece of paper was born in the UK. It was made of color in the paper factory. The paper wanted to travel the world, waiting in the sationary in theUK. One day, the piece of paper was bought by little Johney. He is a primary student. He wanted to send a letter to his friend, Audy, in Colombia. The letter was written by little Johney, and he put the letter in an envelope.
Little Johney wrote his friend's address, and put the stamp on the envelope. The envelope was taken to a postbox and the envelope was later collected from the postbox. Then it was classified in the post office. A few days later the letter was delivered by a postman, then it was recieved by Audy.
When Audy recived the letter, the envelope was opened. Audy read the letter, then he replied to the letter from Johney. The letter was recycled in the Colombian factory. Finally, the recycled paper was made into new paper. Then it was waiting in the Colombian sationary shop, and it waited another chance to travel. That's the paper's life story.
Teacher David
Good, but...
1)Names= no artice (a / an/ the)
2)Paper + message = letter Not paper
3)Revise punctuation/ linkers (then / next / later)
6.3
Thursday, 16 July 2009
Saturday, 11 July 2009
Homework 7th July 2009
Homework 7th July 2009 Teacher: David
by Li-wen(Nina), Wang
Using appropriate past and present tenses, write about the last live music event or festival you have seen or visited. [125-175words]
In fact, I haven’t been to see music festival. In my opinion, music festivals always have too many people dancing together, especially the young and crazy people. The place is often set up on the beach, big city squares. I haven’t seen a music festival. I don’t like music too loud and crowded people dancing together, sometimes they also dance crazy. I don’t want to take my children there, because it is dangerous. I have heard about music festivals, some bad news, such us young people drinking too much, some people took lots of drugs to enjoy dancing, and many people made a lot of rubbish in there . Nowadays, young people are always thinking about how to enjoy life at that time. They uausally forget that they make a lot of bad news during the music festival.
Teacher said:
Good Attempt Nina. Please revise the present perfect tense.
Past action--started in the past continuing until the present.
Past action with no specific time reference.
6.3
by Li-wen(Nina), Wang
Using appropriate past and present tenses, write about the last live music event or festival you have seen or visited. [125-175words]
In fact, I haven’t been to see music festival. In my opinion, music festivals always have too many people dancing together, especially the young and crazy people. The place is often set up on the beach, big city squares. I haven’t seen a music festival. I don’t like music too loud and crowded people dancing together, sometimes they also dance crazy. I don’t want to take my children there, because it is dangerous. I have heard about music festivals, some bad news, such us young people drinking too much, some people took lots of drugs to enjoy dancing, and many people made a lot of rubbish in there . Nowadays, young people are always thinking about how to enjoy life at that time. They uausally forget that they make a lot of bad news during the music festival.
Teacher said:
Good Attempt Nina. Please revise the present perfect tense.
Past action--started in the past continuing until the present.
Past action with no specific time reference.
6.3
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